Joined on 5/2/15
Wha- we have to rename Elana? No! WHY!? How did it happen? It was Jane, wasn't it? I knew she'd be a crip in the plans. Oh no wait, it's purple text, Elana is probs asking the questions.
Also, 'Who am I is no longer what I was once...' is that right? If it is, it might need quotation marks making, '"Who am I" is no longer "what I was" once...', to make that sentence a little more understandable. Otherwise, 'Who am I' should be 'Who I am'.
P1: Who are you?
P2: "Who am I?" . . . "Who am I" is no longer "What I was" once . . .
It's a sentence fragment so when I read it the way it was I was confused initially. That just separates it so you know what your referring to. This is just a long winded way of saying take out 'once' because somehow it destroyed the meaning of the sentence (but a college English teacher would never tell you that). Or swap 'am' and 'I' in 'who am I' . . .
. . . English is fun.
EDIT: The scene is Elana who asks a question to a second person and the answer of that person. You are right, it the "who am I" should be between quotes but for an easier understanding we'll leave "Who I am."